Peer Review for Erin McCabe

Imma take a look at Erin McCabe's project in this post!



1. The name of the title and author for the project you reviewed

Erin wrote A Nostalgic Glance Back

2. A working hyperlink to the project you reviewed

My comment on Erin's project

3. An explanation of the peer review activity you selected for the project you reviewed

I chose to review her conventions, but I picked up other things along the way as I read. I decided to review conventions because they're the easiest way to recognize a standard college essay, everybody knows them, but they're also so easy to miss and lose easy points on.

4. An explanation of how you think you helped the author with your feedback (in other words, how did you help them make their work better?)

I suggested Erin use page numbers, or some sort of header when she turned her whole project in, because I have seen almost everyone else use that.

5. An explanation of how you incorporated something from the suggested Student’s Guide readings (or any other course materials, if you’d prefer) into your feedback

I also encouraged Erin to capitalize her proper nouns in order to make her project more credible and professional.

6. One thing about their work that you admired or think you could learn from


Erin's use of white space and smaller paragraphs made her essay really easy to read and I was able to get through it really quick. My paragraphs were less in quantity but longer in length.

Editorial Report 9a

Alrighty. Comin' at ya straight from my brain. Two versions of my introduction paragraph. I chose to edit this paragraph because hahahah did you read it before?? Wowza. Well, here are the old and revised versions. Take a looksie.

Introductions

1. How did the content change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the content is being communicated more effectively in the re-edited version?

I made my new introduction a little more formal and definitely added more specific experiences while expanding on the ones already present. I wanted a lot of good background of english-class-hatred to be able to expand on in my essay and then be able to negate, as well.

2. How did the form change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the form is presenting the content more effectively in the re-edited version?

The form stayed pretty much the same. I started with a grabber, included some personal stories, and ended with my thesis for the essay to follow.

Editorial Report 9b

Aaaand, here is my other revision report. This time, we'll be looking at my first body paragraph. So click the link below if you're looking for a riveting experience reading about my opinion about my own take on writing.

Conclusions


1. How did the content change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the content is being communicated more effectively in the re-edited version?

Wowza. I made it a lot of content changes by just adding more specific experiences and also adding where I'm intending to go with my writings in the future, how they will be relevant to my career, and then finishing by wrapping up in summary my essay.

2. How did the form change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the form is presenting the content more effectively in the re-edited version?

Well, I made it a lot longer. I didn't want it to be so short in comparison to my other paragraphs because then it just looks like I didn't spend time on it instead of just wrapping it up briefly.

Open Post to Peer Reviewers

'Suhhh friends. Here is the first version of my reflection. A wee bit nostalgic. But nevertheless, enjoy several pages of me love-hating my experiences with writing classes!

Super Rad Reflection

~ Let's Talk About Me ~

1. Key information about your particular project that you would like anyone who peer reviews your draft to know

Heh. It's six pages. Enjoy. I mean, I don't know what else to say, because we're all doing the same thing, so yeah, it's a reflection of the semester.

2. Major issues or weaknesses in the “Rough Cut” that you’re already aware of (as well as anything you’d like to know from your editors about those weaknesses)

I hope my paragraphs aren't too dense, but then again I didn't exactly know how to achieve the length it should be with only five paragraphs without having them be ridiculously large.

3. Major virtues or strengths in the “Rough Cut” that you’re already aware of (as well as anything you’d like to know from your editors about those strengths)

I really like my wording. I hope you do too!

Peer Review for Rhiannon Bauer

This post will be a review for a student who is in my section of the course.

1. The name of the title and author for the project you reviewed

This is a review for Rhiannon's untitled final video.

2. A working hyperlink to the project you reviewed

My comment on her production schedule.

3. An explanation of the peer review activity you selected for the project you reviewed

I chose to review the production schedule pretty much because I had already reviewed the content outline, and then when I clicked on her production schedule I struck gold in the form of beautiful organization!

4. An explanation of how you think you helped the author with your feedback (in other words, how did you help them make their work better?)

I suggested to Rhiannon that she look into the opportunities that were available in regards to the technology one could use to produce her video. I told her about the options she had regarding software, microphones, and filming tools, and how each of them helped me out when i was making my video.

5. An explanation of how you incorporated something from the suggested Student’s Guide readings (or any other course materials, if you’d prefer) into your feedback

I incorporated the use of introduction and organization with Rhiannon's production schedule. I wanted to focus my comment on my experiences with my video essay and how my feedback could possibly improve her experience with this genre of project.

6. One thing about their work that you admired or think you could learn from

I really liked that Rhiannon's schedule was in an updatable table. It made it easy to read and edit as need be.

Peer Review for Mike Duffek

This post will be a review for a student who is not in my section of the course.

1. The name of the title and author for the project you reviewed

This is the untitled final project of Mike Duffek.

2. A working hyperlink to the project you reviewed

My comment on Mike's content outline.

3. An explanation of the peer review activity you selected for the project you reviewed  

I chose to critique Mike's outline because...pretty colors. His color coding attracted my eye and then I accidentally read through the whole thing and then just thought I ought to make comments on it since I had to for this post anyway!

4. An explanation of how you think you helped the author with your feedback (in other words, how did you help them make their work better?)

I really liked Mike's outline; I did suggest that he look into the sources he plans on using and actually physically incorporating them into his video. I think that would look really nice and provide a break up from just the voice over pictures that most video essays have.

5. An explanation of how you incorporated something from the suggested Student’s Guide readings (or any other course materials, if you’d prefer) into your feedback

I commented on Mike's organization, but specifically in reference to his external sources as I mentioned above. I said that it would be nice to see the use of his evidence (his other projects) in each of his paragraph segments of the video.

6. One thing about their work that you admired or think you could learn from

Mike's outline was so easy to read; the colors he used and the use of white space really broke down the overview of his project on such a comprehensible level. I'd like to revisit my own outline and model from his.

Production Report 14b

This revision post will be for the conclusion part of my essay. Below are links to the original and revised versions of this part of my project.

Conclusion can be found here.


1. How did you decide to use form to present your content in the raw material you’ve shared here? How did the conventions of your chosen genre influence your choices?

Since I'm doing the standard college essay format, my genre's conventions are mainly summarizing what I talked about in the previous paragraphs and tying it all up while bringing it full circle in some way. I felt like I was going off on some tangents and so I'd like to revise it to make it more cohesive with the main points from the other paragraphs, but essentially, I used the whole of my essay to compile a suitable conclusion. 

2. How did the production of this raw material go? What kinds of any hiccups, challenges, successes, creative epiphanies, etc. occurred during the process?

The production of my conclusion was a little more difficult than that of my introduction because i had to keep in mind the whole time to make the paragraph come full circle.