Local Revision: Passive and Active Voice

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Passive	Active (Specific)	Active (General)
·       Was announced ·      Were hit ·      Occur ·      Forced ·      Is affected	·      Roaming ·      Evoke ·      Introduce ·      Implores ·      Surfaces ·      Asserts ·      Conjure ·      Declared ·      Dwindle ·      Cripple ·      Endorsing	·      Ceased ·      Are (8) ·      Is (18) ·      Walk  ·      Find ·      Attempting ·      Was (7) ·      Passing ·      Marks ·      Announced ·      Remove ·      Made ·      Was making ·      Decided ·      Stopped ·      Selling (2) ·      Gained ·      Have employed ·      Were (2) ·      Remain  ·      Placed  ·      Has been aware ·      Following (2) ·      Stay  ·      Points  ·      Has been declining ·      Fall  ·      Played  ·      Taken  ·      Recognize  ·      Understand  ·      Placed  ·      Has been  ·      Incurred  ·      Have (4) ·      Put  ·      Has existed ·      Will rally  ·      Portrayed  ·      Is geared  ·      Fixing ·      Puts  ·      Solidified ·      Remain  ·      Influence  ·      Has witnessed  ·      Observed  ·      Take  ·      Happened  ·      Opened  ·      Standing  ·      Purchase  ·      Relocate  ·      Carries  ·      Pare  ·      Stops

1. Analyze your verb usage in regards to passive voice and generic active voice.

Yes, I do use instances of passive voice and a large majority of general active voice. My reasoning for using the passive voice is because each instance of its use is because I am trying to order my sentence in a way that will be cohesive with the rest of my paragraph. For example, it flows well to juxtapose the same subject at the end of one sentence and the beginning of another. In some cases, I used a passive verb so that the reader wouldn't be lost on who the sentence was about (considering the fact that the story frequently jumps from stakeholder to stakeholder. As far as general active verbs go, I will go back and edit my draft for more descriptive words, but there are many instances when the general active verb is not only sufficient, but necessary. For example, the excerpt "Larry J. Merlo...made the company's statement" flows better and provides a more succinct and clear description than "Larry J. Merlo...enunciated the company's statement" in my opinion.

2. How could your verbs be improved?

In relation to my last example, I am not saying there is no middle ground for finding verbs that at least provide a little more description that my initial choices. I will improve the verbs that I currently have that have the potential of expressing the 'how' of the action. I will look for synonyms for my is/are/was/were verbs as well, because even if these verbs are relatively generic, I have repeated them a lot.